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| comment | | "parent_author":"arthur.grafo",<br>"parent_permlink":"lcsatellite-001-boxee-the-alternate-lc-story-book-11-preface-and-p001",<br>"author":"alexander.alexis",<br>"permlink":"re-arthurgrafo-lcsatellite-001-boxee-the-alternate-lc-story-book-11-preface-and-p001-20171011t194141105z",<br>"title":"",<br>"body":"All this talk about characters gaining their own life and talking to you and making demands etc.,<br> seemed just silly to me when I used to hear it from writers. After starting to write my first novel (still on it!) I understood what they meant! My characters don't of course literally talk to me or anything like that,<br> but it does feel like they sort of gain their own life and go on and do their own thing. Like,<br> for example,<br> I will create a secondary character who is just a tool to push the story forward. It's a very 2D character. Even 1D. But then,<br> the more I think about him,<br> the more full-fleshed he becomes,<br> or wants to become. He's not satisfied with the very superficial and one-sided personality I gave him. So he gets a backstory (this is how novels keep growing,<br> btw!) I can imagine that with writers who have a more active imagination,<br> the characters may come alive in a more robust way,<br> like talk to them in their dreams for instance,<br> or they may start \"caring\" for these characters more than they do about some real people,<br> strangers for instance. \n\nYou should indeed consider splitting your stories into more posts,<br> ain't no one got time to read all that! Most steemians will just pass.\n\nHaving said that,<br> I really don't know where I'd split it! The story makes sense this way,<br> beginning,<br> middle,<br> and end,<br> and looking forward to where they take her. But,<br> just point of fact: no one will read it! (well,<br> except me!) That's just how it is.\n\nThere are some typos or grammar mistakes here and there. Like one I remember is daughters' instead of daughter's (being able to search the long text would come useful here!) \n\nIn the second paragraph you change from plural in the first sentence to singular in the next,<br> and it's jarring,<br> and the reader is autocorrecting you,<br> thinking \"their\" in place of \"her\",<br> until he understands that you do actually mean \"her\".\n\nI like the concept of a term applied to people who can't feel others' emotions. I like the idea of the box. I don't know if I like the inflation \"boxee\" though. Don't know why. Maybe something similar would be more appropriate. While I kept reading the story,<br> I thought of \"boxed-ins\",<br> maybe spelled differently,<br> but same pronunciation.\n\nAnd I would've gone for something like \"normie\" instead of \"normal\". There's a reason it's \"boxee\" and not just \"box\". The word must be different from the *normal* one.\n\nI liked the reference to our world as being the virtual one,<br> in the book.\n\nGenerally,<br> for a post of this length,<br> it kept me interested. I like the simple language. Not many polysyllables. Makes you enter the world of the children more realistically,<br> since you think you're reading it from their simple-language perspective. And simple language isn't bad anyway,<br> it's how Hemingway and others do it.\n\nIn fact,<br> I have a book to recommend to you! For some reason,<br> reading your story,<br> I think you'd like it. It's Sherwood Anderson's [Winesburg Ohio (http:\/\/a.co\/dThvRAR ). It's really a very good book,<br> and relatively underappreciated. It has very simple language,<br> and I find it very impactful in its emotions.\n\nI like the theme of your work,<br> the intention,<br> the morals. And,<br> like I said,<br> I kept reading,<br> I felt drawn to the story,<br> and that's important. There's something there.\n\nSorry I didn't reply earlier,<br> I was busy these days. I generally am. I used to post every other day,<br> now I barely post twice a week. I will reply to your comment to my post and will check out your posts too at a later date,<br> already upvoted but will read later.",<br>"json_metadata":" \"tags\":[\"sfandf-fiction\" ,<br>\"links\":[\"http:\/\/a.co\/dThvRAR\" ,<br>\"app\":\"steemit\/0.1\" " |
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